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  easy roommate

 

that winter she mainly looked at rooms

the thumbnail pictures

of beds still in their plastic wrappings

gleaming kitchens

granite veneer uncluttered

she read descriptions of gardens

and single quiet dogs

winced at misspellings in descriptions

free of grammar

and although she could not remember

showing interest

in Docklands, Leytonstone or Willsden Green

futures in these places

beckoned with their adjectives, proximity to Tesco

and several all night buses

 

why live with strangers

 

she remembers kitchens

she has known

the greasy cupboards

the tupperware lunch box that melted on the stove

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Elaine Booth

Mon 1st Nov 2010 18:17

The sense of the familiar is very strong for me with this poem. Very succinct - unquestionably, lived experience shines through. I appreciate the contrast between what is promised and the memories of the reality.

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pauline sewards

Tue 19th Oct 2010 21:43

thanks all for encouragement - look forward to participating on the site x

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Ann Foxglove

Tue 19th Oct 2010 16:23

I really like this, last line is esp fab. With a few simple words you have created a very moving piece. xx

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Ray Miller

Mon 18th Oct 2010 12:22

Enjoyed a lot. Well observed, especially liked this bit:
and single quiet dogs

winced at misspellings in descriptions

free of grammar

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Andy N

Mon 18th Oct 2010 08:18

Hi Pauline;

Your poem I think is a excellent example of something I was discussing with somebody last week oddly enough of detail in poetry...

I've never lived in London for example, but know enough of Leytonstone (Have a ex who lived there) to tell a story or two myself, but what I like about this piece it is skillfully told enough you don't have to know the area to be able to see the piece in question.

I particularly like the ending.. Top stuff! x

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