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stairs talk poem to man

we know each other good long time

had ups and downs I see you grow

from small to taller every day

since early steps just you and lady

racing over me together

almost tumbling tangled urgent

slower now preserving moment

heavier the footprint falling

and so many your descendants

feel like treadmill weight of bearing 

focusing on flights of fancy

why your daughters choose sit on me

talk talk talking all the time?

go worn and torn go bare go boring

peek up dresses make life brighter

only tiny consolation

maybe perk me up fresh cover

something like a brand new carpet


man stares at stairs and climbs

with care respect humility

at bedroom door hears wife whisper

good job stairs good job

wanna take a peek? 

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Ray Miller

Tue 12th Oct 2010 16:29

Thanks all. I don't know why I decided that stairs should speak like this.But who knows? Graham and I are both fans of A.E.Housman, I guess.The conceit is that both wife and stairs want a new carpet and conspire against husband. Regular stuff in our house.

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Laura Taylor

Tue 12th Oct 2010 15:26

Yet another one of yours that I really like ray :)

I too love the 'pidgin' language used. "peek up dresses make life brighter" - funny line!

I'm not really sure what that last line could mean...I like to ponder it though :)

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 11th Oct 2010 20:18

Very clever, Ray. The ending is terrific. A story, a whole life. The pain possibly inherent in the end (according to interpretation) is bitter.

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 10th Oct 2010 15:08

I like this too. (What with Graham's old dining room table having a personality and now Ray's stairs coming to life - whatever next?);-)

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Greg Freeman

Sun 10th Oct 2010 13:55

Like this view from the bottom up, Ray, and the twist when you get to the top. Also enjoyed the economical, 'pidgin' language

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