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Take me home

Take me home

 

This city

Is my concrete playground

But is the epitome of my boredom

And insecurity.

 

These lousy streets

With no sense of energy

Are the streets I walk

With no enthusiasm.

 

But throw me up.

Drop me.

Catch me before I hit the ground.

Make me feel alive.

 

Take me to the place

Where my heart is

Where it's so quiet you can hear

Everything!

 

Where the bird song seems so loud

Where the heather's scent's so sweet

Where the views are a sight for sore eyes

That's where I long to be

 

No need to watch over your shoulder

The only gun shots are from hunters

Shooting game.

Safe.

 

They say home is where the heart is

But my home isn't here

So take my to that place of freedom

Let the wind be in my hair.

 

◄ Desire or Truth?

Mother - I'm not 100% happy with this. It needs work, comments/ideas welcome!! :) ►

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Andy N

Thu 16th Sep 2010 08:15

i like the ending here, lucy in particular.. i like the piece, but there are a few lil edits i would consider (go through it with you next time i see you) x

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 15th Sep 2010 22:39

Lucy there are some nice words in this piece, but for me it is spoilt by the overuse of cliches like, home is where the heart is, sight for sore eyes, etc. Say the same thing with better words and the work will improve immeasurably. Welcome to WOL by the way, we all learn form each other here.

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