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It Was An Autumn Day

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It was an autumn day

 and it was cold,

 the autumn in the yard,

 the thunderstorm was arguing with rain,

 the leaves were falling down to the ground,

 someone's soul sat quietly under the bench.

 It shivered with cold and it was wet.

 The words of its owner it remembered,

 it could not do anything but regret.

 "My soul, you prevent me from living,

 you can't stand any deceiving,

 you pain so hard, you better stay here in the yard

 as I can't stand those pains any more. What for?

 I can't live anymore like this,

 I think without you I can exist.

 My eyes are tired to cry,

 may be it's better for you to live in the sky?

 Please, leave me alone!

 I want to live on my own."

 And the soul went away in a hard rainy day.

 It rambled about the wet yard

 without finding any regard

 looking at windows and eyes

 but nobody heard its cries.

 The autumn in the yard,

 the thunderstorm was arguing with rain,

 the leaves were falling down to the ground

 and rustled under someone’s feet,

 the soul had no one to meet.

 No one heard when it cried,

 So, it has slowly died.

 Larisa R(Odessa, Ukraine)

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<Deleted User> (6895)

Sun 12th Sep 2010 13:12

oh Larisa! do stop worrying about your English-you are doing very very well-relax! I don,t need to be an expert to see that your poems are as good as any on here-stop putting yourself down girly! all you need to do,is keep them coming-and like all of us,you will get better and better-even me...one day...in the far future! haha! no,seriously-well done-a great big kiss to you for being a lovely lovely person-and!-POET! now,believe in yourself! enjoy your time on here-see you later Darling-thank you-Stefan-xxxx(M-xxx)

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Sun 12th Sep 2010 11:35

So many beautiful words you've said. It looks as my English is really poor. With love, Laura

<Deleted User> (6895)

Sun 12th Sep 2010 11:19

Good morning Larisa-what do I think of this poem?...to be honest,words cannot describe-but thats all I can offer..by saying..beautiful! wonderful!..brilliant! fantastic! and my favourite one....WOW!!!!! well done lovely Odessa girl! lots of love to you-Stefan-xxxxxxxxx(M-xx)ps..and the picture is gorgeous too!

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Lynn Dye

Fri 10th Sep 2010 23:08

Lovely poem, Larisa. Sad and beautiful, I like the thunder arguing with the rain too. xxx

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Fri 10th Sep 2010 20:35

Thank you, dear Ann for understanding.

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 10th Sep 2010 17:59

I really like this Larissa. " the thunderstorm was arguing with rain" is my favourite line. Thunderstorms do sound very argumentative don't they, sort of bossy! And of course the picture captures it too. "someone's soul sat quietly under the bench" is lovely too. Poor soul!

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