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The Loft

His loft is tidy in places

in others, dark, dirty, disarranged.

There is treasure in the dust,

buried treasure, buried seeds,

longings, loves, lingering echoes

of lost life in the filtered light.

The hopes, the work,

craziness that didn’t work.

His grandfather’s radio

that will never work again.

He accuses himself of sentiment

and pleads guilty.

 

And there is Christmas,

lurking so brightly in dark boxes,

in a gloomy, cobwebby corner,

waiting to burst forth with colour and joy.

 

His mind is like his loft.

From time to time he sighs

over memories, past glories and lost hopes.

But sometimes

he blows dust off the things of youth.

◄ The Moment

Holiday (or – stop moaning ya daft bugger and get on wi' it) ►

Comments

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Lynn Dye

Thu 9th Sep 2010 19:47

I enjoyed this, Dave, it sounds rather like our loft! Good one, Lynn x

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Andy N

Thu 9th Sep 2010 08:18

good stuff, dave with a particularly strong ending (i love the reference the dust off the things of youth) .. nice one - andy n

<Deleted User> (7212)

Wed 8th Sep 2010 22:52

I like the whole, but I particularly like the middle verse, Dave, it could be a poem in it's own right. Brill !

<Deleted User> (7789)

Wed 8th Sep 2010 21:18

That's a very appropriate extended simile, Dave (I think - mustn't get too technical about these things as i could be wrong!)

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