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Night Watch

The old familiar shadows
cling to old familiar walls
as early morning spins round again.
 
I lie, eyes wide open, and listen to the rain
I continue the watch; 4am and all is well.
Nobody is sleeping here.
 
Try as I might, I cannot grasp
the ethereal gossamer threads.
Can't switch my brain off,
I've run out of sheep.
 
I long to lie in torpor,
or slumber for a week
But I tumble through the gloaming
and life goes on after dawn.
 
I sigh a sleepless sigh
as I greet my alarm clock again.
Its purpose now as a reminder
of when others will be awake.
 
So that I can cease my moonlight vigil
and rejoin the human race.
At least until tonight.

◄ When?

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Bernadette Herbertson

Thu 19th Aug 2010 14:16

really enjoyed reading this steve and as one who has difficulty with sleeping throughout the night I can relate to this poem well ! really good poem..best wishes bernadette

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Andy N

Wed 18th Aug 2010 08:16

excellent stuff, steve - really drew me in this piece..

for some reason, i am best drawn to splitting the last line apart from the last stanza to make it:

so that i can cease my moonlight vigil/
and rejoin the human race/

at least until tonight.


this way then - it perhaps gives a bit more emphasis on the last line.

either way, really, really enjoyed this.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 17th Aug 2010 18:21

Steve, I find much that is good in this poem. The first two stanzas had me completely; then 'the ethereal gossamer threads' almost made me stop reading. IMO, if you remove one non-essential 'artsy' line from the stanzas of four lines each, the poem will be better. My comments are always offered with respect.

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