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Whim

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On a whim we did
Outside the limits hid
In transcendental style 
If only for a while
We slide between the seems
A wordless understanding
Channelled access to our dreams

 

Beyond the realm we slipped
With silent steps we skipped
Behind the background noise
With dedicated poise
That tripped our lips to kiss
Bereft of any reason
Here in momentary bliss

 

Yet who are you?
And who am I?
No history known
No past to tell
Only a kiss might seem familiar
And on repeat I’d know it well.

 

For every touch I did surrender
And every breath you stole away
With such fondness I remember
When you kissed me on that day.

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<Deleted User> (4744)

Wed 21st May 2008 16:09

Hi Alison - Like Darren I especially enjoyed the closing stanza, probably because the rhythm of the words is consistant and the rhyme pattern well known without sounding too forced. That's not to say I didn;t enjoy the rest, just not as much.

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clarissa mckone

Wed 21st May 2008 15:21

Hi Allison, I enjoyed reading this poem very much. nice work!

darren thomas

Wed 21st May 2008 15:18

I particularly enjoy the final stanza

"For every touch I did surrender
And every breath you stole away
With such fondness I remember
When you kissed me on that day"

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Jeff Dawson

Tue 20th May 2008 23:04

Hi Ally

What wonderful romantic thoughts that last sentence provokes, thanks and thanks for comments on my poem, hope you like any others I've done - will have to check out more of yours now!

Will let you know when I have, best wishes Jeff

<Deleted User> (4281)

Tue 20th May 2008 20:02

Alison
The poem is wonderful. I pictured your story in this one
and it feels good inside my heart.
I love the romantic approach in this write.

Thank you,
Zuzanna

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