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The Wind & The Rain

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His desolate thoughts

Were taken by the wind

A husk, sat fiddling with thread

Picked from halcyon times

He looked out to the sea

It was raging

He wished himself that rage

But, instead, calmly sat fiddling with…

The thread had gone

He took a sip of tea turned cold

And itched

Always the same itch 

The wind was gathering a storm

His old jacket eagerly billowing

But, his flat cap was the first to leave

It danced a joyful farewell 

To become grain for the hourglass 

His old jacket was next, 

Then his life-stained shirt

Followed by his trousers,

Skin, flesh, innards

His eyes, the portals to so much, 

Leaked a final tear

It began the rain.

The young boy stood outside a farmhouse 

His dirty vest & shorts dripping wet

But, the rain…

The rain felt so good.

The year was uncertain, 

But, then again,

Isn't everything in life?

 

Painting ©️ Brigitte Schweitzer 

 

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Stephen Atkinson

Wed 12th Jul 2023 22:04

Thank you, Ruth. Yes, I thought I'd send a bit of a storm your way, just to add to the atmosphere 😀

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Ruth O'Reilly

Wed 12th Jul 2023 11:41

Superb piece Stephen. I also coincicidently start reading this as a rain shower turned into a full on storm. It nicely added to the atmosphere 😁

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Stephen Atkinson

Wed 28th Jun 2023 16:59

Thank you, Stephen! 'The wife' used that word as well, unsettling. She added, "a bit like your chilli con carne ..." Not sure what she means. 😕
Cheers!

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Stephen Gospage

Wed 28th Jun 2023 08:22

Something special about this, Stephen. It starts with the cup of cold tea, I think, and then just spreads.......Very atmospheric and unsettling....

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Stephen Atkinson

Tue 27th Jun 2023 22:14

Thank you so much Keith & John for your wonderful comments! I actually wrote this sitting in the garden, hung over, whilst the dreaded beer blues, & darkening clouds came creeping. 😀 Perhaps I should use this technique more often lol. Thanks again.
And for the likes Tom, Russel, K.Lynn, Helene, & Manish! A flower for you all! 🌷

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John Botterill

Sun 25th Jun 2023 22:04

I agree with Keith. You have captured something remarkable in this poem. It seems to strip humanity down to our essential uncertainty. Great poem. 😎

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keith jeffries

Sun 25th Jun 2023 17:10

Stephen, you have branched out with this incredible poem. It had me transfixed. I can't quite get over it. A poem of distinction with under currents. My imagination was held captive. Do you have anymore?
Great.
Thanks
Keith

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