Ramshackle
The comfort of the counterfactual
was sought as a last resort
from reality's ramshackle
tenement, where betterment
seems a star too distant,
extinguished perhaps
already, despondent
that the advent
of the voiceless
never truly came...
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betterment
seems a star too distant,
I know the feeling only too well!
A great deal of truth within this poem, Holden. Hits the mark!
Fri 11th Nov 2022 01:54
Thank you both so much for your kind and thoughtful comments, I'm truly grateful! 😊
Stephen, you are right that we all think of counterfactuals, often to the detriment of the present moment!
Rose, you picked up on exactly what I had in mind when I wrote that line!
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Thu 10th Nov 2022 22:46
Fabulous Holden. The workings of the universe are truly mind blowing as in the time that the light from implosions of stars would take to reach a terrestrial observatory -' extinguished perhaps already '
brill poem!
Rose 💋
I like this, Holden. I'm sure we all think of counterfactuals, what might have been....
'Reality's ramshackle tenement' - great concept.
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Holden Moncrieff
Sat 12th Nov 2022 01:47
Thank you so much, John and Uilleam, it means a lot that the poem resonated with you! 😊