Ramshackle

The comfort of the counterfactual

was sought as a last resort

from reality's ramshackle

tenement, where betterment

seems a star too distant,

extinguished perhaps

already, despondent

that the advent

of the voiceless

never truly came...

◄ Nobody.

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Holden Moncrieff

Sat 12th Nov 2022 01:47

Thank you so much, John and Uilleam, it means a lot that the poem resonated with you! 😊

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Uilleam Ó Ceallaigh

Fri 11th Nov 2022 17:25

betterment

seems a star too distant,

I know the feeling only too well!

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John Botterill

Fri 11th Nov 2022 09:26

A great deal of truth within this poem, Holden. Hits the mark!

Holden Moncrieff

Fri 11th Nov 2022 01:54

Thank you both so much for your kind and thoughtful comments, I'm truly grateful! 😊
Stephen, you are right that we all think of counterfactuals, often to the detriment of the present moment!
Rose, you picked up on exactly what I had in mind when I wrote that line!
💐

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Rose Casserley

Thu 10th Nov 2022 22:46

Fabulous Holden. The workings of the universe are truly mind blowing as in the time that the light from implosions of stars would take to reach a terrestrial observatory -' extinguished perhaps already '

brill poem!




Rose 💋

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Stephen Gospage

Thu 10th Nov 2022 17:26

I like this, Holden. I'm sure we all think of counterfactuals, what might have been....
'Reality's ramshackle tenement' - great concept.

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