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Independent

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Independent - What does that mean?

In my flat; never to be seen

No one to help me, make a brew: You’re

Independent now, they said.

When it’s time to make my bed, I find it a

Bit tricky

I ask for some help, a hand comes up: You’re independent now.

My meal for one, it’s easy they said

Don’t worry if you burn your fingers'.

A neighbour; he’s independent too

He shouts a lot, and throws things, he scares

Me sometimes.

Now I have a job, “That’s great Karen, you’re really

Independent now”.

I know the bus, where to get on and off

“That’s all you need to remember” they said.

Back in my flat again, my heart hurts: Does that mean

I’m in pain?

Off to the Doctors; I’m fit as a fiddle he says!

“This is the tenth time this week Karen, it must stop!”

Hop on the bus again, it’s the wrong way, I’ve got no

Money, the driver asks me to pay

They say: This is being independent .

Belinda Johnston

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Ja Mata, Domo Arigato ►

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<Deleted User> (4281)

Mon 24th Mar 2008 21:53

Hello Dear Belinda

Thought provoking poem; So many issues just with one word” INDEPENDENT" Well this word is a broad spectrum word to be used. Some like independence and some do no not!

I believe it is a matter of choice which direction an individual takes. Life in general requires being INDEPENDENCE...Again; I can go on and on this one… We had to teach independence our clients who lost the privilege due illness or accidents.
GREAT POEM!!!

Kind Regards,
Zuzanna

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Belinda Johnston

Sun 23rd Mar 2008 09:30

Thank you very much David, Mel and Clarissa for your comments. You're all quite right about the character and a mimi story. I sat down for quite some time and thought about the person that influenced this poem. It's like they became part of me, and I was feeling there pain, emotion.

It can be a lonely existence in this world sometimes eh?

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clarissa mckone

Sun 23rd Mar 2008 05:45

Hi Belinda, this is very nice, I could see it as if its a mini movie. How those words ring in my head and heart. take care

<Deleted User> (5984)

Sat 22nd Mar 2008 20:16

Lovely poem, beautiful Belle. Its' really interseting the way you have got into the head of the character. It is a very thought provoking poem.

Mel
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Dave Morgan

Sat 22nd Mar 2008 19:05

Love this Belinda, says so much in so few words, tells a story, my weakness, a film within a poem, great.

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