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Setting

 

Sun drifts on a Chardonnay haze,

reflects the bottle green

upon pale skin,

casts long shadows off breathless peaks

 

dews the valley.

 

Cooled air kisses flushed red lips,

licks droplets of grape,

and swallows the moment.

 

Flesh brushes....

 

tender flesh.

 

Peregrine fingers explore,

reaching inside

bringing forth soft tears,

arched form,

and gentle sighs from bitten lip.

 

Teased to no return

he is absorbed within her

they breathe as one

move as one,

are one

 

tangled...

 

flowing...

 

pulsing...

 

The Sun sets with a smile.

◄ At Night (rewrite- previously Message)

Comments

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Lynn Dye

Sun 1st Aug 2010 13:30

Hi Ian just stumbled on your poem somewhat late. Really enjoyed it, some excellent lines.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 16th Jul 2010 14:39

Really good, Ian. I like your figurative images like: 'Chardonnay haze reflects the bottle green'; 'cooled air kisses .... and swallows'; 'The Sun sets with a smile'. This is very imaginative, and you follow your idea with good diction that evokes emotion. The last line is a scene-stealer, shows real skill.

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Andy N

Thu 15th Jul 2010 08:17

lot of good lines here, ian - 'Cooled air kisses flushed red lips' is my favourite..

be interesting to see how this goes down live!

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