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Emptiness

It fills the room and strokes each wall,

a stale and stagnant smoky pall,

as if the seasons stuttered in late autumn

and time's hung out awaiting its post-mortem. 

 

Soft moans escape from pressing lips,

the sound of silk on fingertips,

sweat congregates upon our skin

and emptiness pervades within. 

 

Tomorrow it will start again,

light breaking through the window pane,

unsteady hum of early morning traffic

ascending to this pitch where psychopathic

 

voices whisper, whine and hiss

"We cannot take much more of this!"

Those who gawp too long in mausoleums

become the very stuffing of museums.

 

Sentences both short and long

pace the space where time is hung

and strung out on a line , its fingers flapping:

admit defeat it's to this beat your feet are tapping.

 

 

◄ Know Thine Enemy

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Ray Miller

Tue 8th Jun 2010 18:49

Thanks very much, Al. Mermaids, eh? Thought it were the ambulance siren again.

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Tue 8th Jun 2010 17:48

This is good, very good. I can hear the mermaids singing

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Ray Miller

Sun 6th Jun 2010 22:15

Thank you very much, Cate and Dave.

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Dave Bradley

Sun 6th Jun 2010 21:52

Powerful - some great images

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Cate Greenlees

Sun 6th Jun 2010 18:29

Good one! I can def see you tugging the forelock to Eliot here. I like it!
Cate xx

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Ray Miller

Sun 6th Jun 2010 10:36

Yep, that too, Chris. It's the scattergun approach.

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Chris Dawson

Sun 6th Jun 2010 10:24

Ah - you see ... I got it completely wrong - I thought 'Sentences both short and long' was a reflection on the human condition.
Cx

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Ray Miller

Sun 6th Jun 2010 10:22

Thanks Chris.The "Sentences both short and long" line is meant to acknowledge the problem you highlight - amongst other things.It's all supposed to be a bit T.S. Eliot!

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Chris Dawson

Sun 6th Jun 2010 09:10

Fantastic imagery - particularly like the first verse. The only lines I'm not quite sure about are the last on the second and on the final verses- the scan seems wrong to me; too short in the second, too long in the last.
But very interesting poem, I like it very much.
Cx

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