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Goodbye At The Door

(The sad truth of the current crisis for those that go to hospital is that they have to say their goodbyes at the front door, just in case.)

 

If this our last goodbye, I'll say it at the door,

Please believe me when I say I couldn't love you anymore,

You are my morning Sunrise, my moon, my very breath,

What you gave me saved me, and that is why I don't fear death,

You are my soothing waters, the fire that burns within my breast,

So if this is our last goodbye, know that it's our very best,

Because it means we stood together 'til the very end,

Side by side, hand in hand, goodbye my love, my life, my friend.

◄ Birdsong

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Jason Bayliss

Mon 14th Dec 2020 15:13

I think you're right Ghazala, but maybe the important goodbyes last forever?❤

J. x

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Ghazala lari

Mon 14th Dec 2020 11:37

Some goodbyes are forever. I think

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 7th Apr 2020 23:22

Thanks Hannah, and thanks Cynthia. Yes the anymore thing was deliberate, I nearly wrote, "I'm sorry I couldn't love you anymore," and toyed with a few possibilities. But in the end I hoped that people realised I meant, "Any more," and, "Anymore," given the possibility that if it was me leaving never to return I would mean both. I couldn't find a way to give the duel meaning in text, but trusted it might come across in spoken word. And thank you, because yes, I really did mean it when I said I like it when people ask.

J. x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 7th Apr 2020 19:49

Very strong, and beautiful.

'anymore' puzzles me. Whether it means 'any longer' or 'any more ardently'.

As written, it means 'no longer' which may be exactly what you want.

As 'any more' it would mean 'any more greatly'.

You kindly said I could always 'communicate' with a question. So I am.

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Tue 7th Apr 2020 18:36

Very moving.

Hannah

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