this is really harder than I imagined because I have no sense of the original. Perhaps, Saleema, you could read it as an audio and upload it? You need to create an audio file then upload it using update media

Saleema, I am only trying - to catch the spirit of your verse, its sincerity. I know poetic traditions differ, especially in cross languages. I am trying,in so far as I understand English poetry, to make your ideas catch the imagination of the average English reader. English styles vary hugely. One major difference, I think, between Western and Eastern poetry, is the use of repetition. One tradition uses it hugely and the other very little. It's a major hurdle in cross-translating. Neither one is wrong or right - that would be sheer idiocy.

Saleema, have I got this right? Is the writing on the right a Panjabi version of the Urdu?