Sorry it's been awhile since I've logged on! I agree--"fine" is way to overused. M.C., I like the "here to me" suggestion. Thanks for taking the time to read and drop a line!

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I would be tempted to have the final line read...
"here but me"...to bring it full circle.

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I can definitely relate to this LB and agree wholeheartedly with Andy's 'fine' comment.

Your poetry is always well presented on the page which I like a great deal especially this 3,3,4,3,3 line structure.

Thanks for posting.
Colin

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Original item by Little Bit

Fine is such a misused word. I say it all the time when asked how i am, often to deflect further questioning. I get the feeling that's how you're using it here.

There are several words i think you could drop to make the poem even more terse.

Hope all's well with you and yours.

Keep 'em coming.

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