Safety pinned and tilted,
they had the world at the tip of their cigarette.
One of many fab bits!
I think I'd leave out the first "their" in the honey and apron line. (Love your stuff!)
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A wonderful poem, I thought, especially the 2nd verse. All the better for being a little less obscure and labyrinthine than some of your stuff. Brilliant. Except for the commas.
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Although I love everything about this poem the first stanza seems to me to be particularly perfect. The repeated line, "following the ...." is a good touch, very loaded. It's a pleasure to read your work, Marianne. XX
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Philipos
Tue 1st Nov 2011 17:19
A refreshing peep back to the sepia years and protests of another type within a different strata of a back then society.
Seasons regulated the social life of the privileged few while others starved. Yet you let the readers decide this for themselves.
Well crafted poem.
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<Deleted User> (7212)
Wed 2nd Nov 2011 21:45
...gave me shivers - marvellous !!
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