I'm a big fan of sea shanties, fishermans songs, and the fisherman's wives songs...this is very similar...and I'm a big fan of this now
Excellent - loved it
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Wed 26th Jan 2011 14:40
I agree with every comment here :), fab LOVED IT :) you are a talent and a half :)
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I too enjoyed reading this, Marianne - several times!
It has such a lovely and romantic feel to it...
My favourite lines:
'shuddering; salty kisses falling on her lips.
Her smile, her smile, he held bewitched
in ripples eclipsed in the dewy light'
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Very beautiful language and imagery.
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Tue 25th Jan 2011 19:59
such a beautiful read, rich in its language and lovely to think over..
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Fabbo! Ancient, dream-like vibe without descending into archaic language and a dozen cliche traps neatly side-stepped. That is a real skill.
Beautiful.
Thank you.
Jx
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lovely poem, rich language and beautiful sea language
im hooked on the frishermens bait x
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Good Evening Marianne
You have excelled... this is a wonderful almost illustrated piece.
I loved ;
shuddering; salty kisses falling on her lips.
Her smile, her smile, he held bewitched
in ripples eclipsed in the dewy light
Well done again .
Gus xx
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Tue 25th Jan 2011 14:41
Memorable, moving, reminds me of my daughter and living on the shores of Loch Fyne in Argyll and Bute in a castle
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So many images, it's almost too thick with them - but not quite! Love it! x
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Her smile, her smile, he held bewitched
in ripples eclipsed in the dewy light
that touched her face, like a sleeping child,
and whispered, once, and only once,
his keeping heart, “Good night”.
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Lovely lines.
I like the opening stanza, the continuity of the language and way it feels in the palate upon reading.
tactile and soft.
Chris
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Marianne Louise Daniels
Wed 26th Jan 2011 17:04
thankyou for your kind comments.
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