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A Hairs Breadth

Hang the sword above my cot by the single hair of a horses tale,

That even in my sleep I must beware the shadow of its blade,

Lest I forget price to pay should my endeavours fail,

As it strains at its slim tether, all that keeps its fall delayed,

And let its weight fill my mind as the second hand slices time,

Let its ever present threat weigh heavy on my soul,

Certain in the knowledge that one day its binds will snap,

And only by a hairs breadth did I live a life at all,

For it's only in acceptance of this Dionysian curse,

That by a single horses hair hangs ever over me,

That I may find the courage to contend with the adverse,

Knowing that one day its falling blade will set me free,

And in that stark acceptance I will move beyond regret,

That I was born beneath this blade suspended by a hair,

And focus on my life so hard that soon I will forget,

The sword of Damocles is even hanging there.

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Jason Bayliss

Sat 21st Sep 2019 00:06

So sorry Rose, exactly the same problem my end, (well android not iOS). So pleased you liked it.
Funny you should mention, "The Pit and the Pendulum," Ray, I had an image of that in my mind but couldn't seem to reference it in the finished piece.
And Ruth, do you know what, I think I'd have been alright as a knight, mind you these days I'm an archer (genuinely I do archery).
But yes it struck me the other day when I was reading about the sword of Damocles that actually, it's that one hair of a horses tale, that's the key ingredient, that's the unknown, the weakest link in the chain, and there by a single hairs breadth all our fates hang.
Thanks all for commenting and liking.

J. x

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Ruth O'Reilly

Fri 20th Sep 2019 22:31

What an interesting concept Jason, and yes in a way we are all, only a hair's breadth away from our own personal swords falling upon our brow!

The world you have transported us to in this piece Jason, convinces me that your past life in the knighthood regresses itself through your poetry.

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raypool

Fri 20th Sep 2019 21:28

As close to self torture as I've seen, Jason. The idea of the sword's weight above is a chastening one, and reminds me of the pit and the pendulum. Plenty of gothic pretence.

Ray

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Fri 20th Sep 2019 18:48

Jason, having just managed to click the like button before my iphone data ran out, I am now back topped up to say that this poem has wonderful originality, brilliant rhyming, and extremely interesting subject matter according to how you have written it

fabulously faultless, dude.





Rose ?

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Jason Bayliss

Fri 20th Sep 2019 17:17

Thanks Rose for liking.

J. x

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Jason Bayliss

Fri 20th Sep 2019 17:15

Yes Keith, it's kind of the notion that until you accept that the sword is now, has always and always will hang over us all, you're trapped by that knowledge. At some level we all feel the bony hand of the reaper at our shoulder and unless we focus on the tasks at hand, for some the knowledge is paralysing. It's almost an acceptance that our own particular sword belongs to us as much as we belong to it and that actually no matter what we encounter it's probably the one absolute constant in our lives.
In a sense it's saying, until we embrace our inevitable demise as part of our narrative we'll always see it as something to fear.
Until it is our friend, it is our enemy.

J. x

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keith jeffries

Fri 20th Sep 2019 15:33

Jason,

an interesting poem whereby we all live under the fear and anxiety of death. To be set free is surely to die when the sword falls and all draws to a close. The sword of Damocles hangs over us all as does the threat of a nuclear holocaust or meeting our nemesis. A poem to ponder on.
Thank you for this
Keith

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Jason Bayliss

Fri 20th Sep 2019 12:41

Thanks Brian, I'm pleased you said that because I wanted it to have an, "Old," feel about it. It's such an ancient metaphor that I thought that might be more fitting. Really pleased you liked it.

J. x

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Fri 20th Sep 2019 12:35

It's got the feel of being written a couple of centuries ago. Good one.

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