Persephone's tangled legs

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Persephone lay tangled

In my bed-clothes.

I watched trapezoids

of summer light

make motes

alive in her warmth.

 

I leant against the wall

and counted her breaths:

 

Pale and shallow her rising.

Her hair webbed.

and

gripped to her belly

my gown

since last she bathed.

 

I lowered my case

and loved her more.

 

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Words and foto  Tommy Carroll

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 21st Jul 2019 23:12

Stu and Mart thanks, again it helps and it ...helps Tommy

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Martin Elder

Sun 21st Jul 2019 16:59

You had me with those opening lines . A real cracker this one. I love your use of traperzoid in this context.
Nice one Tommy

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Stu Buck

Sun 21st Jul 2019 15:27

superb mate

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 21st Jul 2019 13:54

Hi Dev and Don
I do appreciate your posts.
I may have left the back-door open in this poem.
The shape of some light, on a surface through window glass, can be fancifully described as such.
And Dev pardon my use of "To clarify" that upon retrospect came across as a rebuff - far from it. It was a genuine request to enquire.

The legs and her legs.

Cheers lads.
Tommy

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Don Matthews

Sat 20th Jul 2019 23:22

A lesson in trapezoidal motion. Thanks gents.....

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Devon Brock

Sat 20th Jul 2019 23:20

Plus, I have struggled to find an adequate way of describing the shape of light through windows. Calling it what it is, geometrically, is an epiphany. Da bells started chimin'.

D

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Devon Brock

Sat 20th Jul 2019 23:17

For the reader, Tommy, for the reader. I thought it a brilliant play.

D

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Tommy Carroll

Sat 20th Jul 2019 23:13

To clarify?

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Devon Brock

Sat 20th Jul 2019 22:58

To clarify, a trapezoid's non-parallel sides are called "legs". Nice work, Tommy.

D

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