As if to care

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Was I now the only

one on the beach?

 

She had stood behind me                                                                                       

and I had waited

for a spoken conclusion.

 

But without words  

the  sound that

the soft tread of her

departure made

on the sand had

told me of her decision.

 

Sunsets care nothing for    

lengthening  shadows

nor waves

that they must lap and fill

the printed pools left by feet.

 

How hard not to

turn and look

at the woman that pulled

all towards her;

those that enjoyed

her gaze;

that enjoyed her thinking;

when to listen 

when to care.

 

Words and foto T Carroll

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raypool

Thu 18th Jul 2019 20:31

There's a strong sense of tension here Tommy, in having all that behind you like a denial, but a ghostly feeling of longing I often see in your work. A suspension of realisation that feels like a betrayal.

Very poetically satisfying especially the having to share someone in this way.

Ray

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Mae Foreman

Thu 18th Jul 2019 19:29

High high quality poetry here! Excellent Tommy!
Thank you🎈
Mae

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Devon Brock

Thu 18th Jul 2019 19:04

Fantastic imagery, Tommy. Choosing only to show the sunset, the waves and footprints was a genius stroke, and provides the foundation for the final stanza. The labor put into this poem is evident, but the read is silky smooth. Thanks.


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