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The Art of War

It starts,
As these things always do,
With the smallest of things.
A remark from me
And a comment back from you.
 
And suddenly the game commences
The battle lines are drawn.
We bolster our defences
Man the cannons and ready the guns
 
The gloves are off
The claws are out
With swords unsheathed
We join in war 
 
Love is forgotten
As vitriol grows
Only the winning matters
Your rules, my rules
No rules
When we come to blows.
 
But right now
We are both fire
We are both ice
We circle each other
 
Words fly like arrows
Blotting out the sun
They fill the air
With screams of rage

And it's too late now
To turn the page 
As anger burns respect away
Calculated barbs hide our guilt
And change the state of play

And suddenly
It's over.
I deal the mortal blow
Silence
Descends on our battlefield
And tears start to flow

 

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Steven Kenny

Fri 26th Feb 2010 01:08

Rodney: thanks for your comments regarding the metaphor :-) I think I'm in danger of overusing it a bit :-) The poem is about something in particular to me, but I haven't added any specific references to keep the poem a generalisation of the situation.

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Steven Kenny

Fri 26th Feb 2010 01:04

Emma: Thanks for your comments! :-) Glad you liked the way it ends, that was the toughest part (for me) to write!

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Rodney Wood

Thu 25th Feb 2010 22:28

Generous use of the metaphor but it needs sharper lines and be about something in particular.

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Emma Robinson

Thu 25th Feb 2010 17:53

I don't know what rwally means.

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Emma Robinson

Thu 25th Feb 2010 17:53

I rwally like the way this one builds and then falls with this sorry silent battlefield at the end, relationship graveyard :(

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