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by Jason Bayliss
Sunday 28th April 2019 9:20 am
"Tanka You Very Much." ►
Mon 29th Apr 2019 05:54
No! Dorothy But I can hear someone getting a ticking off.
Sun 28th Apr 2019 19:43
Must be the silly season. About this time last year I posted
which received a lot of response. It was completely meaningless, as I suspect yours is Jason. Apologies if I am wrong.. Still, it passes the time doesn't it? Personally I don't care as I've just watched Worcester beat Gloucester so the tempus can fugit as much as it likes.
Sun 28th Apr 2019 18:57
Brilliant alliteration, and though it was quite a hefty verse it was well worth the effort of reading it.
I see where Brian is coming from, and can understand why two lines could work, but I would leave it just as it is.
Sun 28th Apr 2019 17:51
Liked this! The older one, alas, gets the faster time flies. It's always Sunday!
Sun 28th Apr 2019 17:05
Thank you all so much. I thought of this about two weeks ago and didn't post it then because I thought, "It's not really a poem, as much as a statement." But, in the end, every time I thought of it, it just made me smile, so hey ho.
You are right Bryan, the quotation marks are significant.
Once again thank you all so much.
Sun 28th Apr 2019 16:32
This reminds me of a one-word French poem which reads “pousse”. This is a word which was used in a game played by children when one of them wanted to get out of the game for a moment. I understood this poem to mean the (impossible) need sometimes to get out of our overwhelming lives. Always thought this was a most touching poem.
Sun 28th Apr 2019 16:25
Ticks are good, have you ever heard of anyone tocking a box?
Sun 28th Apr 2019 12:25
The quotation marks are significant. It's not just a clock sound that's been heard...someone has said it.
Sun 28th Apr 2019 11:12
I think tick should go,I think people could find it irritating.
All the best des
Sun 28th Apr 2019 10:46
mmmm! you could shorten it further by deleting "Tock"
Sun 28th Apr 2019 10:32
Try it on two lines.
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