No! Dorothy But I can hear someone getting a ticking off.

Must be the silly season. About this time last year I posted

Tennis
Dennis?

which received a lot of response. It was completely meaningless, as I suspect yours is Jason. Apologies if I am wrong.. Still, it passes the time doesn't it? Personally I don't care as I've just watched Worcester beat Gloucester so the tempus can fugit as much as it likes.

Brilliant alliteration, and though it was quite a hefty verse it was well worth the effort of reading it.
I see where Brian is coming from, and can understand why two lines could work, but I would leave it just as it is.

Cheers Kevin

Liked this! The older one, alas, gets the faster time flies. It's always Sunday!

Jernnifer

Thank you all so much. I thought of this about two weeks ago and didn't post it then because I thought, "It's not really a poem, as much as a statement." But, in the end, every time I thought of it, it just made me smile, so hey ho.
You are right Bryan, the quotation marks are significant.
Once again thank you all so much.

J. x

Jason,
This reminds me of a one-word French poem which reads “pousse”. This is a word which was used in a game played by children when one of them wanted to get out of the game for a moment. I understood this poem to mean the (impossible) need sometimes to get out of our overwhelming lives. Always thought this was a most touching poem.
Well done,
Jeannot

NO! Desmond
Ticks are good, have you ever heard of anyone tocking a box?

The quotation marks are significant. It's not just a clock sound that's been heard...someone has said it.

I think tick should go,I think people could find it irritating.

All the best des

mmmm! you could shorten it further by deleting "Tock"

Try it on two lines.