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She smiled and said hello 

Hello , her eyes said shinning , her voice peaceful 

Peaceful she was as she spoke 

She spoke of a better place 

A better place filled with harmony 

A harmony sans melody there 

She wanted to go there .She was ready to go 

To a place not on pictures we hung

She hung to dear life onto every word I spoke 

She spoke. I listened but did not hear 

Hear her plea when she asked 

She asked me to take care of myself 

She hugged me and smiled 

She smiled and said goodbye 

Goodbye: Little did I know that was her last

 

◄ Out of body

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Chloé

Mon 1st Apr 2019 15:54

Thanks for the comments and feedback guys .

@John Thank you for bringing that line to my attention . I reworked it. Also , what an interesting interpretation? The subject topic here is a little different but I think the beauty of poetry is that it could mean different things to various individuals.

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john short

Mon 1st Apr 2019 02:08

Hi Chloe

I don't know the background here but I can connect with the poem as I have Nigerian friends who left their home years ago and then things happen, family members die etc. and they never imagined when they left that they would never see them again. A very touching poem, well done. Only perhaps the second line needs reworking a bit (?).

Best wishes,

John S

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Angel whisperer indigo child x

Sat 30th Mar 2019 10:16

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