SHOAL

I kept   filling   the gaps

with fish             but still

the water came through

until there was  no deep

           left deep enough

      no fish large enough

        to fill my fish mouth

                       with water.

 

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raypool

Sun 24th Mar 2019 17:25

Thanks Rachel - there was no underlying idea other than identifying with the theme, but it's good when you get thoughts about a poem that may add body to it. Glad you liked it.

Ok David, that's a thought! An intrusive mood is ok by me Rachel.

Thanks for stopping by and liking Steve, Jennifer, Jon, Whiskey, Heart of Lead and Dorothy.

Ray

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elPintor

Sat 23rd Mar 2019 21:32

I appreciate the gag, David..

One of my dad's favorite lines is "stop talking about me"--he obviously brought me up to appreciate fine comedy ;

(Please pardon the intrusion--it must've been the mood last night)

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Wolfgar Miere

Sat 23rd Mar 2019 10:50

Yeah well, that's just twisted my melon man.

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elPintor

Sat 23rd Mar 2019 10:48

I sense a proverb in the undercurrent, but dare not disturb this by probing--it's quite the little piece to admire without adding a single word.

Rachel

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