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Walking Backwards

Running with the pack

I slow my pace.

Jostled from behind

I resist, come to a halt,

Dig my heels in tight.

A space forms around me as

The multitude swarms past

And I become

'Other'. 

In this space 

I hear a humming bee

I smell the seasoned earth

I feel the tender sun

Gently kissing my cheek.

And slowly I take a step

Backwards.

And as the human murmuration

Streams endlessly by

Chasing dreams of old,

I am walking backwards.

A whole universe of molten gold

Flowing through my veins and

Lightning bolts sparking through my bones

With every step I take.

 

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Hazel ettridge

Wed 6th Mar 2019 14:57

Enjoyed all comments - thank you.

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Tue 5th Mar 2019 18:51

a thousand times beautiful..your poems make us want to be better writers...

Frances Macaulay Forde

Tue 5th Mar 2019 14:14

There should be a 'Love' button!
Beautifully restrained but inclusive, offering an expansive view of possibilities.
Well done, Hazel.

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Mae Foreman

Tue 5th Mar 2019 12:37

I agree with Kate! This is one if these poems that you want to come back to again. Lovely picture! I'd like to lean back and submerge into this lovely fantasy too!
Thank you?
Mae

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 5th Mar 2019 12:02

As Keith says, open to interpretation. An excellent verbal changing of pace and in my interpretation. It near perfectly describes the beautiful transition between the world in which we live and one which I very much like to journey to, as often as I can. Where you are alive, alert, awake and poised.
Very, very good.

J. x

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keith jeffries

Tue 5th Mar 2019 11:27

Hazel,

this poem is exquisite in its profound descriptive quality. It is also open to interpretation. Well done. I really love this kind of poetry.

Keith

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Hazel ettridge

Tue 5th Mar 2019 10:55

Thanks Kate. Walking backwards is a big theme in my life right now.

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Tue 5th Mar 2019 10:51

I like this very much Hazel. As if being so much in the present heightened your awareness and took you somewhere else. One I'll read again. X

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