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CEREMONIAL

There's a cleft in a rock where blood flows out

from a gorge in Turkestan,

accessible only by arduous routes,

those who see it are mightily uplifted.

 

A blind man apparently started to see

when the sun came round at a quarter to three

on a highly significant alignment day.

 

A man sells ice cream from a four by four

a queue discreetly off to one side,

many pilgrims come to pray

in utter awe and mute prostration.

 

Celebrities with awful restrictions

come far and wide for benedictions

dropping in by helicopter

 

casting shadows across the gorge,

others of course must walk with sticks

but all seek out their religious kicks.

 

No one knows why the blood flows out,

the site is untouchable,

the mystery persists;

 

but every day a farmer comes

along the crest where a clump of trees

seeks out the merest kiss of breeze.

 

He passes above the holy spot

with head downcast like a tiny dot.

I saw him once with a bucket upended

amidst a patch of fresh killed sheep,

 

watched him with his knife in hand,

the sun just glinting off the blade

the wash of red,  a ritual

of a sort,  the perversion of a holy sport.

◄ TEMPLE IN THE SKY

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raypool

Fri 29th Mar 2019 17:27

Thanks Jennifer for coming back and rectifying your deletion! An almost biblical delay but highly welcome with the revelations you make. This must have seemed highly blasphemous to some, but, hey we must bravely post. Your comments are like an exoneration.

Ray

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jennifer Malden

Fri 29th Mar 2019 10:16

Hi Ray! Must have managed to delete the comment - no loss some might say! Here they see Madonnas, bleeding or weeping usually, and if they catch on it ups the incomes of local residents enormously!
The farmer's wife will run a B n B, the sons act as guides, daughters have a restaurant - cousins taxi and bus services, and everyone else can sell beads and other tat from Taiwan as souvenirs.
Keep up the good work, Jennifer

<Deleted User> (21487)

Sun 24th Feb 2019 19:06

Sorry Ray I think i may have spoiled it for others.

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jennifer Malden

Sun 24th Feb 2019 11:38

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raypool

Fri 22nd Feb 2019 22:58

Blimey, did I really write this? apparently I did.

Thanks Dorothy for following me and having all revealed !

Ok Dave, own up time!. Glad you saw the irony in it.

Rachel, that's a hell of a nice thing to say. You are in my club for getting my modus operandi. Why should we simply impose views on readers? Invite them to participate, see if they have a nose for it. On a more serious note, whatever purpose we create for ourselves should be an open framework not a cage or restraint dressed up as a way out. IMO.

I'm with you all the way David. As you say, there is no point in trying to penetrate a perfect disguise if only you can see it.

I guess there was a point to the poem if it struck a chord.

Thanks all! and Jon for the like!

Ray

elPintor

Wed 20th Feb 2019 20:44

I very recently heard the statistic that one in four Americans believe that Jesus will return in their lifetime. I'm no fan of statistics (check Benjamin Disraeli, or Mark Twain? on the subject) but the prevalence of such self-centered thinking wouldn't surprise me in the least.

Who wants to see the wizard behind the curtains after travelling the yellow brick road so faithfully?

Rachel

PS
..was feeling unusually talkative last night but forgot to say that I appreciate the way certain poems get around to a point without spelling things out or telling the reader how to think or feel. It gives us lots of freedom to expand--that's the quality that drew me into this.

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Dave Caplan

Wed 20th Feb 2019 20:27

Nice exposé Ray.

I have no sympathy for those fleeced in the name of religion.
My advice to them is 'Wake up.'

<Deleted User> (21487)

Wed 20th Feb 2019 08:04

Oh! the sting in the tail - it was not what I was expecting, it makes for a very good read
thank you

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