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Bedtime

Bedtime.


She looks at me, petulant.
Blue eyes wide and challenging.
She won't back down.
Nor will I.

It's become a daily ritual,
this stand off between us.
Headstrong and bold,
she holds her ground,
even as the tears wet her cheeks.

She clutches Daisy, almost nonchalant,
yet her fingers, white tipped with pressure,
reveal the truth.
Daisy, her comfort, her treasure.
Her weakness.

Dare I use this knowledge to gain the higher ground?
I dare.

As my hands lift Daisy from hers, she sees.
She knows I know.
And she folds.
She pleads.
She screams.
She stamps and throws.
She collapses in a heap,
hair mussed and eyes tired.
I win.

◄ fourteen years

Leave me unseen. ►

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 5th Feb 2010 15:53

This is superb, brilliantly executed. I wouldn't alter a syllable. But the psychological ramifications of the poem's content are immense in your spearheading of adult/child relationships.

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Rachel McGladdery

Fri 5th Feb 2010 10:53

Aww,lovely.I love the way the last few lines collapse onto each other like a child crumpling.Brill.
Rachel
x

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Antony Owen

Fri 5th Feb 2010 10:47

I've got all this come ahhhhhh

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winston plowes

Fri 5th Feb 2010 00:46

She knows I know.
And she folds.
She pleads.

Many of us have been there Kathryn. thats my favourite bit (Above) you will grow together... Win x

<Deleted User> (6895)

Thu 4th Feb 2010 23:52

Nice mummy-poem Kathryn.Do you always win though? -Stefan.

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