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On your knees

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On your knees before me

Head bowed, filled with shame

My presence is absorbing

As I softly speak your name

 

Gentle, but with firm command

My voice so resonates

You attend to every breath I take

Your heart pounds as it waits

 

So enclosed and so aware

Confined within this time

I’m wrapped around you totally

You feel so much, you’re mine

 

Anticipation so excites

Inflames yet placates fear

For at this moment you will give

The reason you are here

 

Your body full, your mind so clear

You yield, give up to me

And I shall lead and guide you now  

One touch will set you free

 

◄ Denial

G'day Fromelles ►

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Christopher Dawson

Fri 5th Feb 2010 09:26

hey guys, many thanks, truly appreciated.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 20th Jan 2010 11:12

The poem is gripping in its imagery, and for me, dreadful in its context, especially introducing 'shame'. Made me think of concubines throughout the ages, and obviously still existing: dominion and submission is a very popular sex ploy still, hopefully as a mutual 'game'.

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winston plowes

Tue 19th Jan 2010 23:15

'Head bowed', 'filled with shame' and the photo make this a less appealing subject for a poem to me. Your words however and the way you use them e.g. 'Your body full' are powerful and create a heavy and intimate atmosphere so well done. top writing for me. Winston

<Deleted User> (7266)

Tue 19th Jan 2010 19:10

Real feeling described in this one. I like it! S x

<Deleted User> (7073)

Tue 19th Jan 2010 18:17

A sensual poem this, eloquently put.
I enjoyed it.
TC

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Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

Tue 19th Jan 2010 17:31

A lovely rhyming poem...

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