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moon girl

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Do you remember when they landed on the moon?

I do.

A schoolgirl, I was obsessed with it.

The jerky images on the TV,

the bounding jump, the giant leap.

And I remember going into school next morning,

but something else had happened in the night.

The father of a girl in class had died

and all her friends were gathered round,

and all that I could think to say was

“But he’ll never know they landed on the moon!”

And just because he’d died a day too soon!

He’d taken his own giant leap,

his small step for mankind.

At the time, to me, it seemed a shame.

But no one else had thought of it that way.

And now I see that my first thought was wrong

and the step he’d taken was the greater one.  

 

◄ The lovesong of a lonely vampire

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Dave Bradley

Thu 28th Jan 2010 15:41

Only just come across this Ann - I really must keep up. Excellent poem - nicely balanced and very thought provoking. In my (grammar) school we watched the astronauts bouncing around on the moon. Seems a long time ago now - perhaps because it was.

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winston plowes

Tue 19th Jan 2010 23:50

Wowser...Ann. Quite a trip this, both in sheer distance and humanity. Loved it. Win

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Rachel McGladdery

Tue 19th Jan 2010 21:10

Ohh, I like this lots. It's made me read it three times already. Wonderful poem.
Rachel
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neil gardiner

Tue 19th Jan 2010 14:30

Re read and listened to Moon Girl. Think it is brill piece of work. In my view it's your best.

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Noetic-fret!

Mon 18th Jan 2010 19:18

I wasnt going to add any comments today. I just wanted to peruse the poetry and see what people were writing about this monday. But had to log on to the site just to say that for this poem - WOW!
Brilliant.

Mike

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 18th Jan 2010 17:48

You are all very optimistic re my age, I was at grammar school at the time! But thanks for all the comments!

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Isobel

Mon 18th Jan 2010 17:15

Love the thought processes in this. I think you could be forgiven for your child like reaction - many adults are far worse. My old dad (semi paralysed at the age of 52) would get quite energised when one of his old work colleagues popped their clogs. He just loved out-living people - got a quiet satisfaction from it cos they'd all visited him on what they thought was his death bed...Sorry for wandering off topic - I do like a poem that makes me reflect on my own experiences though - and this one does. Don't remember that actual day - was so very very young and our telly never worked anyway. LOL xx

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neil gardiner

Mon 18th Jan 2010 16:04

Hey Ann. Did't realise you were an octopus. Respect in that department.

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John Aikman

Mon 18th Jan 2010 15:07

I never have trouble remembering the date...it was my birthday! Useful in a quiz every now and again. I'd hesitate to say 'nice' 'cos it's better than nice...it does have a fizzing central conceit...and a terrific ending. Grand poem.

Thank you.

:)

jx

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neil gardiner

Mon 18th Jan 2010 14:47

Hey Ann. Don't beat youself up for something you said in all innocence when you were a child. Your poem makes a great analogy with the "Great Step" we all eventually take. Nice poem. Did't think you were that old to remember 1969!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 18th Jan 2010 12:29

I believe poets are compassionate and dispassionate observers at the same time, and so innately have a sense of apartness that enables them to see situations in embracing language.
I sound like a twit, but I'm not monitoring my words much.

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 18th Jan 2010 12:14

Thank you Cynthia. This event always worried me a bit, as I thought my reaction could be seen as being heartless, even a bit weird. But of course at the time, I was not aware of loss. Also, my Dad had this way of thinking all his life, he wasn't heartless, but could be diverted from sorrow by exciting things that were happening around him. It kept him young, I think. Or maybe it's that thing that poets and writers sometimes have, in the middle of a disaster/broken heart/whatever, there is a bit of them thinking "This might make a good poem."

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 18th Jan 2010 12:09

Excellent. Completely captivating. This is a great universal topic for personal exploration. Mine is expressed in Television Moon on my Blogs here.

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