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Waiting for Mummy


I hide in Nana’s front yard,

Watching for Mummy’s car.

I can hardly wait to see her.

My Nana is wonderful,

But I love my mummy.



When Mummy parks

She just sits there,

With her nose on the wheel

And her shoulders  funny.

Then she pulls her stuff  out

And walks slowly around the car,

Looking for ants, I think.

Nana’s gravel goes crunch crunch.


‘Mummy!’ I yell, and I jump out.

‘Mummy, I’m here!’

Her head jerks up, and her earrings swing.

She smiles like sunshine.

She holds out her arms to scoop me up.

‘Hi, Pumpkin!’ she laughs

And runs the last few steps.

‘I am so glad to see you!’


Cynthia Buell Thomas





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winston plowes

Sat 16th Jan 2010 00:50

Cynthia... this changed my night.. thankyou. Great observations. Great child like observations and language. heart strings etc .It had everything for a poem of this type... i could go on. Win x Thanks for posting.

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 15th Jan 2010 18:09

This does make you think. What was on the mother's mind? Mentioning her shoulder being funny - just the sort of thing a child would see and wonder (worry?) about.

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Fri 15th Jan 2010 15:42

perfect - what else can I say?

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Fri 15th Jan 2010 12:40

I like this one Cynthia. The complexity of adulthood with all its hidden mystery and misery, seen through a child's eye. Very cleverly done.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 15th Jan 2010 12:35

Graham, always thanks for reading and commenting. I considered lengthily the usage of 'mummy' so often. Then I realized, from a child's viewpoint, perhaps at 3 years old, of 50 words used daily 40 would be "Mummy'.

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Fri 15th Jan 2010 11:13

A very picturesque poem this one i think Cynthia.It creates lots of vivid colours in the imagination.


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Steve Regan

Fri 15th Jan 2010 11:05

A vivid picture of human angst and maternal love is eloqently drawn here... and the lovely child's eye view of life too. Like this very much... makes me think.

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Louise Fazackerley

Thu 14th Jan 2010 20:51

i enjoyed the simplicity and the honesty of this. we all turn it on for the kids.

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Graham Sherwood

Thu 14th Jan 2010 20:16

First of all this is a lovely piece of work Cynthia bravo to you. Only negative for me was the repetition of mummy (five times). Two would have been great.

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Dave Bradley

Thu 14th Jan 2010 17:31

Excellent, Cynthia. A whole world is suggested, with just enough clues - the reader's mind races to fill in the gaps

darren thomas

Thu 14th Jan 2010 14:17

I've just read this and it reminds me of a prologue to a complicated Crime Thriller with the scope for a reader's implied and sinister thinking.These 4 lines -

With her nose on the wheel...

And walks slowly around the car,

Looking for ants, I think.

Nana’s gravel goes crunch crunch.

demand a reader's attention.

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