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Collectors

Collectors

 

you have to flatten people

it makes them more collectible

then you put them in categories

 

arranged by how 

helpful they are

to you in your life

 

sort them by situations 

attitudes 

or intuitions

 

of course they might 

occasionally

surprise you 

 

and do 

something

inconsistent

 

but that’s one of the 

dangers

inherent In this approach 

 

I mean it all 

has to end

at some point

 

usually 

an accident 

or something

 

completely 

unforeseen 

so it’s pointless to worry

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Robert C Gaulke

Tue 11th Sep 2018 23:02

Thanks for the feedback.

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raypool

Tue 11th Sep 2018 22:07

A sort of nihilism here Robert, but the ideas are novel and ironic. Please excuse me saying but I think the poem would be stronger without the last three verses. Just my view, but it seems to go for a walk...

with respect. Ray

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Marie Alyza

Tue 11th Sep 2018 21:14

Direct and honest especially the first 3 lines. Thank you for sharing! ♥

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Tapashree Roy

Tue 11th Sep 2018 17:39

The first 3 lines ❤
Well expressed!

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