Beach.
Water wearing tide,
Blind men folded at the front.
Seagulls wash on the long shore
As elderly couples demand comfort.
Children play with pebbles
With feet of afternoon blisters.
The sun hides for a second
Behind the mildest of clouds.
Comments
I agree with Win here, Kealan.. I like the fact that it seems like a full picture but still leaves you with plenty off room to build on it yourself.. Good stuff!
<Deleted User> (7212)
Sun 3rd Jan 2010 23:00
the pleasure's all mine - it's a great poem. you can see it here if you wish. thanks. banksy.
http://www.poemsetfree.com/index.php?page=favourite-poems-by-other-authors
<Deleted User> (7212)
Sun 3rd Jan 2010 20:27
wow! neat, clipped, understated: great poetry.
can I include this on my website under
"favourite poems by other authors"?
good descriptive work.
Hi Kealan... This one is outstanding for me amongst recent blog entries. It is complete, rounded and serves up an atmosphere to savour without too much searching. Win
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Rachel Bond
Sun 7th Mar 2010 01:35
i like this too kealan...its snapshot imagery conveys a scene like a 3 dimensional postcard so simply described with words that usher the feel of the place and of time. lets all go the beach!