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A rhyme it needs a rhythm

To help it lilt along

Without this rhyming rhythm

To me, it sounds all wrong

 

Why can't I write a rhyme

That sounds like Jack and Jill

To me what is important

Is it's done with rhyming skill

 

Many rhymes are bad rhymes

They just rhyme cat with mat

(And yes, our cat he did sat

And wondered where he's at)

 

Skill is non-existent

Rhyming words inane

Messages escape me

Wasted verse, no gain

 

So rhymes they need a rhythm

And if like Jack and Jill

Then cleverly constructed

With no cat/mat rhyme fill

 

Don Matthews April 2018

 

 

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Don Matthews

Sun 3rd Jun 2018 01:33

A rhyme it needs a rhythm
And yes, you're right MC
I feel, without this rhythm
Great discordancy

You'll note my lines are 3-beat
I really like this kind
I like this 3-beat metronome
Pulsing in my mind

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 1st Jun 2018 20:52

A famous songwriter once remarked that the rhythm of life
- like the heartbeat that lives within us all - is the basis of
successful rhyme writing and that discordancy - like an
irregular heartbeat - creates a disturbance and unease
that is counter productive, even harmful to the healthy
fulfillment we seek from life.

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Don Matthews

Fri 1st Jun 2018 10:50


Brian - As a poet it's good at times to explore non-strict irregular pattern. I'm being encouraged to write some prose but my jolly mind metronome keeps banging away when I try ...?

Don

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Fri 1st Jun 2018 10:34

Don - I too like poems that rhyme or at least have a rhythm. However, in recent times I have tended to get away from a strict regular pattern.

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