it is a sphere

after Newfound Planets

 

i have discovered a planet

a peach bruise cloud scoots sweet along the sky

now visualise the starshine spatter like pastels

and a drop that drips

then drops again

and ‘piffs’ in the kiln baked apricot dust

sending up a whisper of dirt.

we have discovered a planet

it is a sphere of awful seas and glaciers that move…

…at their own pace. perhaps we will name it heartbeat

and if anything here has one, we will be amazed

 

 

 

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Frances Macaulay Forde

Tue 24th Apr 2018 12:26

Perhaps a space between is all that's needed, Graham?

A new stanza often denotes a different standpoint, n'est pa?

I enjoyed your words, Stu.

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elPintor

Fri 20th Apr 2018 23:11

I quite like the switch up, Stu, as it is suggestive of differing possibilities and perspectives of the same. And, if I could like a comment, I would send out one for "i am not who i write for".

Rachel

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Stu Buck

Fri 20th Apr 2018 19:12

thanks graham

believe it or not, they are my favourite three lies!

however, one thing i have realised in the last four years is that i am not who i write for. if that makes sense.

so yes, i will have a gander and see what i can do.

thanks for the usual good will

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Graham Sherwood

Fri 20th Apr 2018 12:24

I don't understand the change from I to we in line 8?

I love it until that point, would you consider reviewing the last three lines, ideally make it a little longer too

As usual quality work form you Stu!

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Stu Buck

Fri 20th Apr 2018 10:14

cheers guys!

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Colin Hill

Thu 19th Apr 2018 19:58

excellent interpretation and very ponderable if that's a word.

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Laura Taylor

Thu 19th Apr 2018 12:43

Cor, some pretty seductive sonics and imagery in this Stu - peach bruise, starshine spatter, the piffs line. mmmMMMM.

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