Mortally wounded mountain

with tree clad skin

pinned back revealing

grey marble flesh within.

Scars of old surgery

visible along its flanks.

On winter nights the icy wind

whirls its moans down

the valleys and around the peaks

like the early morning mist

which veils the ugliness.

It can never recover.


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Fri 2nd Feb 2018 22:31

I really like this one Jennifer, it conjures up a sort of flagellation . With respect, I feel the last line tends to short circuit the image and leave us wanting . I would leave it out (IMO). Either that, or add one more line in a sort of answer to it might work as well.


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