Casualty
Mortally wounded mountain
with tree clad skin
pinned back revealing
grey marble flesh within.
Scars of old surgery
visible along its flanks.
On winter nights the icy wind
whirls its moans down
the valleys and around the peaks
like the early morning mist
which veils the ugliness.
It can never recover.
raypool
Fri 2nd Feb 2018 22:31
I really like this one Jennifer, it conjures up a sort of flagellation . With respect, I feel the last line tends to short circuit the image and leave us wanting . I would leave it out (IMO). Either that, or add one more line in a sort of answer to it might work as well.
Ray