COAT HANGERS
Coat hangers queue like question marks
waiting for answers -
asking why they have no shoulders to cry on,
no clothes to rely on.
"Perhaps," they might say, " our owners have
left us on the dead rail;
but why O why did they go away?"
Comments
Great to see you back Suki - the same to you my friend.
Ray
Hi there Ray,
Wishing you a Happy New Year! Have a good one..
Suki
Thanks folks so much . This was haunting me initially because it was going to be about "question marks" and what they represented; which foxed me until I got a more solid image ie the coathangers. Hope that makes sense ?!
The old pulling up the door catches on british cars - even the AA used a plastic version ! I was happy with the first lines, but added an afterthought. Thanks David.
Thanks Kevin. I often bring inanimate things to life - just the kid in me.
Cheers Col. Always nice to get your max. attention - I know what you mean. I think the extra stanza opens it up for more depth - but it's a shame to take the liberty in a way.
Thank you Cynthia. Same as all above, as the point was worth making. Cleft stick time !
Happy New Year to youse all.
Ray xxx
I'm in queue here for pouring praise into your rising cup. I also salute that opening line, and agree that the four line first stanza could be totally enough. But I do admire the extension into another complete idea that invokes the reader's further imagination.
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Sat 30th Dec 2017 09:13
If there was a yearly WoL award for opening lines then this would surely be a contender. The first stanza is superb and stands adequately on its own. I'm not sure the second is needed - maybe, maybe not. I can't decide. Either way, well done for working this one out. Cheers, Col.
Hi Ray.
What an unusual subject. Really worked though. Got to agree with David, the opening line was a corker. I liked the way that you brought an inanimate object to life.
Cheers Kevin
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Martin Elder
Fri 12th Jan 2018 09:03
Yep I have to agree with everybody else that certainly is a killer of a no opening line which draws the reader along through the rest of the piece. Excellent poem Ray