An Anti-Love Poem

by Neil West

Sunday 11th October 2009 5:01 pm

An empty promise

An idle boast

These are the things

We hear the most

Yet we still hold each one dear

And keep them close to our hearts

Our emotional charade

Is an attempt to stay close

To those that we love

And would hope still love us

We don’t want the truth

Because the truth hurts

Rather fill our ears with platitudes

Than stare at us from shallow eyes

And tell us you don’t really care

And never did

We fill our lives with clutter

Of foolish sentiment we mutter

Cast off your emotional baggage

Let your mind rule your heart

When you enter into relationships

Be honest right from the start

Comments

Jeff Dawson

Thu 22nd Oct 2009 21:33

Hi Neil, is anyone ever 100% truthful, doubt it, anyway great poem best wishes Jeff

Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 15th Oct 2009 19:06

Chris' comments are very good. I see options in line presentation that I might change for greater cohesion of your ideas, as you seem to move from one type of voice to another, but that is opinion. The material is chilling.

Nichola Burrows

Tue 13th Oct 2009 11:17

I keep coming back to this one Neil. Great poem, and although it can be a good thing to enter into a relationship with your 'photo album' of baggage etc, and bearing all the honesty of your past, so that you have nothing to hide ( which can create a very stable, honest and enduring relationship), it can also be a difficult one. People have a tendency to fling past wrongs at one-another in the heat of the moment, so maybe sometimes it is good to have a few secrets of ones own that may, if known, create ammunition. On the other hand, if you are not honest, then the baggage can come back to haunt you, and create even more of a hoo-ha! Even though I would love to look through 'rose-tinted glasses' - your poem strikes a note with me. Enjoyed it.

Nicky x

Cate Greenlees

Mon 12th Oct 2009 14:37

The trouble is when you start a new relationship you may not want to bring all the baggage from your past, so you tend to maybe omit the complete truth! And its very difficult to let your mind rule your heart where loves concerned...... unless of course youre out to pull a millionaire!!
Cate xx

Isobel

Sun 11th Oct 2009 19:19

Nice advice, but I'm not sure many people could ever follow it. Some people just fall harder than others, some don't really know their own minds in the first place, others just change their minds as they go along. A myriad of combinations that make relationships such a minefield and the love game, such a cruel one.
A novel take on the theme though - I enjoyed the poem.

<Deleted User> (5812)

Sun 11th Oct 2009 14:22

'than stare at us from shallow eyes' great line. unfortunately i've seen that look a few times.
I agree with Janet on both points x

<Deleted User> (5646)

Sun 11th Oct 2009 11:41

There's sadly a lot of truth in this poem Neil.
That last line is great advice for any would- be relationships.

Janet.x

steve mellor

Sun 11th Oct 2009 10:40

Hi Neil
A series of short relationships then?

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