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Going Around In Circles

autumn came again to deliver

the last rites, stretching

the shedding skin of summer

into shadows that spelt death.

 

but you already knew, sensing 

the earth's thirsty need 

from musty baked breath

whispered up on parched roots

 

and seeing with eyes that 

could stare down the sun,

the emasculation of rays

mocked by morning mist.

 

so, too, a blanket of cold 

spreading out to envelope

the damp, wrapping itself 

like a tourniquet

around the body of winter

squeezing away life until 

the first cries of spring. 

 

but you knew all along 

what was coming and

 

precisely when

to flick the switch

to keep us

going around in circles.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Paul Waring

Fri 28th Apr 2017 21:21

Aythangyow, Raymundo. Your kind words are so encouraging. Glad you and others picked out the first stanza, I probably wrote 30 drafts of it until it finally read like I wanted it to! ##patience is a virtue##

Paul

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raypool

Fri 28th Apr 2017 20:21

A poetic treat and your definitive style gives this a lightness of touch without loss of depth Paul. I love the first stanza especially.

Ray

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Paul Waring

Fri 28th Apr 2017 17:29

Thanks Stu, another lovely comment and I'm very grateful to you.

Paul

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Stu Buck

Fri 28th Apr 2017 13:05

great stuff paul, lovely use of metaphor and the description of the seasons wear and tear on the earth.

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Paul Waring

Fri 28th Apr 2017 11:35

Dear Frances, I'm really pleased that you liked the first stanza and to read such kind praise makes every second of the writing and editing (ad-finitum) more worthwhile.

Thank you dearly.

Paul

Frances Macaulay Forde

Fri 28th Apr 2017 01:49

The first stanza is my favourite in a circular piece which echoes it's subject, style and title, so beautifully.

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Paul Waring

Thu 27th Apr 2017 20:17

Thank you Karen, thank you elP, thank you Raj and thank you David.

I was deeply chuffed to read your kind words and equally chuffed about some lines/stanzas being singled out for praise. And, David, I'm flattered that you used the word 'wordsmithery' - that's very nice.

Thank you all. Paul

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Raj Ferds

Thu 27th Apr 2017 10:10

Paul, another beautiful poem well painted.
Evokes the senses and that what makes it so endearing.

I find two sentences in particular very appealing:
"the shedding skin of summer" and

"wrapping itself
like a tourniquet
around the body of winter"

More please!
Raj

elPintor

Thu 27th Apr 2017 02:14

I particularly like the fourth stanza and how it speaks of the choking of the remaining vestiges which survived the summer's parching effect--the anthropomorphism of the earth really communicates your message well.

elP

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Karen Ankers

Wed 26th Apr 2017 23:42

Really powerful. Love "the shedding skin of summer".

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