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skipping meals on the commuter run

i found a cornflake
it was on my skirt
as i boarded a train
and sat next to a man who was more suit than flesh
he moved as far away from me
as he could
and called up his wife
from his totally up-to-date mobile phone
i pushed down the compact table
the one attached to the back of the chair ahead of me
and i put the cornflake on it
and took a picture of it
on my own mobile phone
and texted it as a message
to a boy i like called john
a message in which i also told him i’d skipped breakfast
and all i had was -
this
one
cornflake
and wasn’t this morning bleak

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<Deleted User> (6510)

Wed 14th Oct 2009 05:29

I like this, it is a good and interesting account of something which only a poet's eyes can see.

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winston plowes

Wed 30th Sep 2009 10:45

Really liked the off beat nature of this one Emily. I have had a go at changing it round a bit. Hope thats ok. Ignore it by all means,it's just a slightly different view. Win x


SKIPPING MEALS

A cornflake clung
to my skirt
as I boarded a train.

My commuter neighbour
was more suit than flesh and
He moved as far from me
as he could,
calling his wife
from his totally
up-to-date phone.

I pulled down
the compact table.
The one attached to the back
of the seat in front.
Put the cornflake on it
and took its picture
on my unfashionable phone.

I sent it to a boy
I like called john and told him
I’d skipped breakfast
and all I’d had was -

this
one
corn
flake

and wasn’t this
morning bleak.



© Emily Josephine McPhillips

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