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Robbers tongue

It was his tongue

Of silken gossamer breath

That led her to believe

That it was nothing but a trice

To give up all that was

Hers to give up

All that she would save for her wedding night

Now gone

Relinquished in the blink of an eye

He the pied piper

Tripped and slipped away a merry dance

She left alone

Cold and naked

In her crumpled bed

Her tears smeared and wrapped in cotton

Cupboard bare love

Where truth had turned to lies

And all that had promised to be unbridled bliss

Was no more than a liars kiss

 

What would she to do now

But take away the beating in her chest

To drown herself in the sorrow

Of what might have been

Down by lakey mere

She would be found

A washed up doll

With that was life now gone from her breast

Her heart torn in two

 

But fate is fate will be

More than a maiden’s broken promise

And liars word

For the coughing spluttering heaving water

Was not to be her final resting place

As an arm as strong and big as oaken branch

Did lift her from her icy grave

Chastised and chastened by that forgiving stare

Whose love knew no bounds

No questions were asked by he

The woodcutter’s son

A year hence on that their wedding night

As she felt his steely arms around her waist

 

She knew she did not need to ask or weep

For he the robbers tongue

Who only months before had met his end

Through cracked and splintered ice

In coal black raven night at lakey mere

Where nobody heard or saw

His cries of reminisce and remorse

No more would be heard of his liars tongue

No more to be a maidens curse  

 

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Martin Elder

Thu 13th Apr 2017 10:08

Thanks Gary
I do like to put some rhythm in my poems if I can, I am quite driven by something of a historical nature or as in this case an almost fairy tale feel to it.
I am on the mend and will probably be back at work soon.
Glad you like the poem
Thanks again

Martin

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Gary Rimmer

Wed 12th Apr 2017 22:38

I really like this one Martin especially the first section and the way you ended it with bliss and kiss. It feels quite rythmic in parts too which I think drives it on. It's quite romantic and has a fairy tale or short story feel about it.

Hope you're feeling better.

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Martin Elder

Mon 10th Apr 2017 18:23

thanks for that Stu yes it could easily be a fairport convention song or maybe steeleye span. I am also looking for ward to seeing you, it seems like a long time. yes I am to be performing see you then
cheers
Martin

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Stu Buck

Mon 10th Apr 2017 10:38

can see richard thompson singing this with his trusty guitar. a tinge of celticness (not a word), a smidgen of fairport convention, a fine poem. looking forward to seeing you in sale, will you be performing?

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Martin Elder

Mon 10th Apr 2017 08:40

Thanks Keith, Ray and Kevin for reading this and for your encouraging remarks with it. When I wrote it I roughly had this idea of a folk song, many of which our old folk songs tell a tale. I take your point Ray about the imagery of strength in this. Thanks Keith and Kevin I am glad it speaks something larger than itself.
certainly if T.V. wants to adapt for a mini series I am up for it Kevin
Cheers
Martin

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kJ Walker

Sat 8th Apr 2017 08:15

really good.
if this story was on the telly, it would be a mini-series, as there was too much happening for one episode. yet you were able to tell the whole story in one poem.
I agree with Keith, "it says much more than the words you have used".

Kevin

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raypool

Fri 7th Apr 2017 17:48

I'm a great fan of this sort of tale Martin, and you do the form justice with a tender and fair hand. The woodcutter carries such a wealth of imagery in the word and belongs to a time of John Bull strength and past glories in a simple frame. Lovely.

Ray

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keith jeffries

Fri 7th Apr 2017 14:27

Hello Martin, Thank you for this beautiful poem. It says much more than the words you have used. Very special. Keith

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