Fate had me worried
it seemed to beg my attention but
never knowingly over - impressed by
life's extensions I gave up the idea
that there is a place for it
in any real controversy or plan.
Like a pop desiderata or a sweet romance
for me it is
the ultimate copout,
leering over our shoulders
like a man in a white van.
<Deleted User> (13762)
Thu 16th Mar 2017 07:34
Ah leave the white van man be Harry - he's had enough to worry about with this last budget but I hear Hammond pulled a U-turn yesterday.
'in any real controversy or plan' I like, as well as the last line. Sry to disagree Harry ?
Col
Shiveringly good, Ray.
I like how that `pop desiderata` undermines the `sweet romance`and also your use of the word `copout`calls the rest into question.
It would finish-much more powerfuly-with that penultimate
line (the last one sounds a bit Lakinesque)
Fittingly short.
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raypool
Thu 16th Mar 2017 21:06
Thanks you Harry, that's a good like! I'll stick with the ending - I like the image it creates but I do take your point.
Col: Horses for courses, glad you like it!
Ray