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Not Quite 8½

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it was one of my Fellini dreams


I'm Guido or somebody 

and you're one of his lovers,

Carla maybe


anyway, you're all over me 

like a cheap suit


clinging tight like Chanel perfume

wrapped around me like a silk scarf

getting closer than briefs

slipping on and off like sheer stockings

wearing me like a hat


but then you notice 

my two left feet 


and 8½ lace-ups

and say,


"buying shoes must cost you a fortune"

 

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Paul Waring

Thu 2nd Mar 2017 13:26

Thanks Ray and Stu, I loved reading your interesting comments. Much appreciated.

Paul

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Stu Buck

Thu 2nd Mar 2017 11:35

one of my favourite fellini's, pushed back only by the obvious (but still immensely wonderful) la dolce vita. you do his vision justice, an excellent piece and there are real touches of his warmth and humour throughout. bravo sir.

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raypool

Wed 1st Mar 2017 22:45

I am tempted to say Paul that the poem falls flat with the end, (as a compliment) and it has a sort of Charlie Chaplinesque humour to it, when considering the lavish romantic element it contains. It is also grotesque . A goodie my man.

Ray

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Paul Waring

Wed 1st Mar 2017 18:32

thanks John.

Now what's that expression....small feet, big.......oh, I can't remember....

or was it big hands, big.....



gloves ?

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John Coopey

Wed 1st Mar 2017 17:36

Pah! Little feet.

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Paul Waring

Wed 1st Mar 2017 16:01

Thanks Col, I'll give some thought to conjuring up a few steamy stanzas and call it '9½ inches' ? or, more like, 'wishful thinking' ?

David, thank you, too, for the kind compliment. The idea came about from another piece I had started to write about walking in someone else's shoes, but then an amusing image popped into my head of literally having two left feet. Yes, there must be something of the circus about my imagination!

Thanks again chaps, I'm very grateful to you for your comments.

Paul


<Deleted User> (13762)

Wed 1st Mar 2017 14:42

try updating your 8 1/2 Fellini dreams to 9 1/2 weeks and report back Paul

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