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apricots

the sky is the colour of the ripe plum bruises on your arm 

baby fat pinched too hard by yellowing talons, nicotine digits 

somewhere something wonderful is happening, but not here 

somewhere something wonderful is happening, in reds and blues- 

velvet seams of jade and onyx explode outwards at a million miles a second 

in jerusalem someone is tasting apricots for the first time.  

ripe from the tree, their tongue exploring the furred flesh 

before canines and incisors smash together and the membrane is broken,  

sending sweet, pristine juices flowing like raging seas 

to the back of the mouth, a cool arc of perfection hitting the back of the throat, 

a throat not red raw with rage, a throat that can swallow without tears, 

a pure, white gullet, not sullied by yellowing talons, nicotine stained digits  

clamped vice-like around a scream.

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Martin Elder

Sun 5th Feb 2017 23:34

The description here is wonderful Stu. Absolutely bursting with taste and colour. Setting all of my senses on fire.
Fantastic

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 3rd Feb 2017 12:04

Stu,
I was looking at this last night, but was diverted.

Respectfully, I would suggest starting the poem from the word `Somewhere`(fourth line) and ending it after `throat` ( fourth line from the end)

Why?...because (IOM) that beginning bit and ending bit take much of the power out of that explosive burst of taste in
between.

This makes a good contrast with Randall Eckstein`s
Watermelon World ?

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Raj Ferds

Fri 3rd Feb 2017 07:17

Intriguing. Mysterious. Mythical. Hard to decipher but ever so readable. I refrained from interpreting it and that's where its merits lie. Thoroughly enjoyable.

Super stuff.
Raj

elPintor

Thu 2nd Feb 2017 22:11

"a throat that can swallow without tears"

..the juxtaposition of innocence with distress says to me so much of what it is to eat bitter fruit.

Illustrative and vivid with a cinematic quality--definitely a hallmark of your writing.

elP

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Paul Waring

Thu 2nd Feb 2017 21:12

Stu, excellent writing that is intriguing and engaging from the start, I really liked the evocative use of colour, sensory perception, the extremes of images and the mystery of the "somewhere something wonderful is happening". I really enjoyed reading this.

Paul

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Graham Sherwood

Thu 2nd Feb 2017 18:47

I really like this Stu,
I initially thought it ended at "someone is eating etc" but then was surprised at the second half.

Personally I don't like smash to describe teeth coming together but the rest is mouthwateringly perfect.

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