My Mind’s A Blank

My mind’s a blank

I just can’t think

To be quite frank

I’m on the brink

Right at the edge

Without a chance

Out on a ledge

Stood in a trance

Stood in a trance

Out on a ledge

Without a chance

Right at the edge

I’m on the brink

To be quite frank

I just can’t think

My mind’s a blank

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 2nd Feb 2017 23:20

Trevor,
Nice steel to sharpen your rhyme on.

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New Shoes

Wed 1st Feb 2017 04:53

I was just afraid of a strong wind.

thanks

old shoes

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Trevor Alexander

Tue 31st Jan 2017 22:27

Thanks guys.

It's not personal, I'm glad to say Louise, it was a kind of a challenge to write this sort of palindrome.

I think it can be quite effective Ray; this is a bit of an exercise in 'can I do it'. 😃

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raypool

Tue 31st Jan 2017 21:27

A clever idea to intone in a repetitive way to give body to the poem - a technique often used in religious ceremony I might add. In this case it works I believe by being quite difficult to analyse in a clinical way - dare I say sort of slippery for the mind!

Nice one. Ray

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Louise Hogg

Tue 31st Jan 2017 21:19

Trevor I really like this. It touches on a stream of conscience that I often feel when writing.
If this is personal thoughts at the moment then it's clear your mind may feel blank but you have wonderful words to describe it.

Louise

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