Now he was stuck with the body

in control of it but not of himself.

He spooned an eye from its socket

angry after the kill,  his purpose spent


the  climax had been in the planning

subtle persuasions of trust, manipulation

and now here on the plateau

it always felt this way

and he needed a memento.





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Wolfgar Miere

Thu 26th Jan 2017 22:35

Hi Killer,

funny thing this, and simple.

You know may favorite line? "It always felt this way"

I am interested in what the victim is, maybe it is not important in your story, but such a detail could develop the piece in any number of multiple directions.


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Thu 26th Jan 2017 19:56

Thanks for your consideration elP. The sad truth seems to be that in the minds of such perpetrators there may be normal thought processes going on . The accounts given are quite often matter of fact in the telling; I wanted to emulate that. The typical type does not really stand out in a crowd.

Thanks Jeff - you may be right there!

Cheers Col . Sorry mate, my mind can play tricks - I simply thought of an eye and a spoon, then fleshed it out!
Often the writing itself is my inspiration.

Paul, don't even think about it! I'm glad you sampled this thanks. aythangyow playmate.

Blimey Louise, perhaps you could fund me - no problem.thanks.

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Louise Hogg

Wed 25th Jan 2017 18:45

I would like to read about his other killings. It would be a lovely opening to a novel. Maybe he hides the body under my 'Magic Carpet'.


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Paul Waring

Wed 25th Jan 2017 09:09

Ray, so superbly dark and sinister, I've been on the blower to Inspector Wexford.....Eyethankgyou! Paul

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Wed 25th Jan 2017 08:15

I think elP and Jeff have both made very valid points - I wonder what your inspiration was or maybe I shouldn't ask? Hope it's not a snippet from your forthcoming autobiography?

'plateau' is an excellent choice of word - flat like his post kill drain of adrenaline - or a plateauing out into a calmer state. It is also a bloody good rhyme with 'momento'.

good stuff Ray.

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Wed 25th Jan 2017 06:17

You could carry this on as a sort of mini series snapshots?.....Jeff

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Tue 24th Jan 2017 22:49

The way you put it, its seems like something anyone should contemplate..I mean, how to handle the anti-climax. Maybe someone whose purpose is so driven by the lead-up to the act could gain as much or more satisfaction through some other "comparable" endeavor. He/she must feel so wasted.

Aberrant, yet not entirely foreign, to surmise.


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