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My Pet, Death

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Quiet as the beach can be
Upon the night as it falls:
Birds flown home, and
Life sounds stilled until
The only interruption
Is the rhythmic lapping
Of the low-tide waves.

Lap, ------------- lap,
The slow drumbeat dance
Of the ocean in the mist,
Dark with the new moon,
And stars obscured in
The low-hanging fog
And chilled air crackling.

As the water caresses
The dark, hidden sand,
A new sound is heard,
Far away, yet approaching.
Lap, pat-a-pat, lap,
The drumbeat pulse
Quickens and morphs.

Now the clanking of chains
Joins the music of the dark.
The chill burns deeper,
The fog falls thicker,
The mist grows heavier,
The sound vibrates around.
Lap, pat-a-clank, lap.

Skeleton arm seems to
Hang out from the mist,
Pointing at a watcher
In the dark, in a tree,
And he hoots, and flies up,
And rids himself of the
Clinging fear that is gorging.

Lap-pat-a-clank, lap
A tinkling as of fine china
Broken into bits and
Tossed together on the deck
Plays in the music of
The oncoming death.
My pet, my lovely, death.

Is this the ship to Avalon?
Is this the one way journey?
Lap, pat-a-clank, lap,
Crunch and tinkle as the
Boat reaches the land,
And a solitary figure
Roughly disembarks.

Here is the body of he
Who was not worthy of
The island of God's Repose,
The burial he will receive
Is the burial with fog,
And the mist will be a
Witness, for the owl has flown.

 

Image of death taken from Is Death Reversible? Is it the right time to find out? https://www.singularityweblog.com/is-death-reversible/ Retrieve January 24, 2017, found at https://www.singularityweblog.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/02/Death.jpg

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Rhiannon

Fri 3rd Feb 2017 19:46

Very atmospheric, I can really picture the scene and it's beautifully chilling. Reminded me a little of Coleridge's The Rime of the Ancient Mariner (my favourite poem) with "the chilled air crackling".

I particularly liked:
"The slow drumbeat dance
Of the ocean in the mist"

elPintor

Thu 26th Jan 2017 22:16

Hi, Randall. I meant to comment on this two nights ago, but somehow couldn't formulate the right combination of words to convey my thoughts. So, let me just say that I most enjoyed the re-introduction of the owl (or, the mention of his absence as a witness) at the end. It really strengthens the atmospheric impact and sense of desolation.

elP

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Juan Pablo Lynch

Thu 26th Jan 2017 03:55

Wow, Wow. Loved reading along with you. Reminded me of a Tim Burton movie. Nice use of onomatopoeia. Lovely form; it also reminds me of classical literature or at least the good 1800s, early 1900s poetry.
All I have is praise for this piece.

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