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stargazer

on our backs

on the ground

in a dark sky town

 

you watched as I pointed

and cast lines among the stars,

 

telling stories to pull them to us from the deep;

 

with fingertips full of starlight

I turned to you and dabbed flashes,

 

tracing golden paths to shine upon your face...

 

the indelible vision of stardust

I once touched still remains--

 

a ghostly strobe forever burned

upon my eye to keep aflame

this lonesome traveling light.

◄ furlough

reconquistadora ►

Comments

elPintor

Sat 28th Jan 2017 15:53

Thank you very much, Andy. It means a lot to get comments from so many others whose writing I admire.

elP

Travis Brow

Fri 27th Jan 2017 07:20

This is a lovely poem elP, full of memorable, evocative lines; 'a dark sky town'...'cast lines among the stars'...'this lonesome traveling light' Proper poetry.

elPintor

Mon 23rd Jan 2017 14:45

Thanks for reading and your kind words, Martin and Ray..I'm happy you both enjoyed.

elP

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raypool

Sun 22nd Jan 2017 16:01

Beautiful moments and thoughts captured and made available to all who appreciate precious times. We can travel in as well as out.

Ray

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Martin Elder

Sat 21st Jan 2017 22:46

there is something beautifully light and ethereal about this poem.
nice one elp

elPintor

Sat 21st Jan 2017 21:58

Thanks so much, Suki, Colin, Hazel, and David. It's a subject I don't often write about, so I wanted to give it some attention. I'm glad that I was able to communicate something of what I felt--enchantment. Some rare experiences just seem to impress upon the heart and mind so profoundly that all else fails by comparison.

Thanks again.

elP

<Deleted User> (13762)

Sat 21st Jan 2017 09:22

think I may have posted a link to that clip before on one of your poems elP. Ah well, the memory is not what it used to be. Fading like the stars. ?
I pinched the 'enchanting' from Suki David :)

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Hazel ettridge

Sat 21st Jan 2017 09:11

A pleasure to read - transported me completely.

<Deleted User> (13762)

Sat 21st Jan 2017 08:29

yes, enchanting. Hold on tight. I'm sure they would have seen the stars if the clip went on a bit longer...

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=naGZvVVSynM

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suki spangles

Sat 21st Jan 2017 04:48

A meditative imagistic poem to sink into. Enchanting.

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