night vision

dark bodies and gravity..

wide fields stir pre-explosive

stars in disarray--

 

shimmering spectral displays become

echoes confined in my atmosphere..

 

radio stars scream long after

their lights disappear into the dense

emptiness of heavens' mass grave.

◄ traveller's token

before I learned mechanics, I learned to mistrust the mechanic ►

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elPintor

Sun 11th Sep 2016 00:28

Thanks all..glad you liked this. I really enjoy the opportunity to write in this forum.

I had a few metaphors in mind when writing this, and besides that, I'm fascinated with black holes.

elP

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Wolfgar Miere

Sat 10th Sep 2016 15:51

elP,

I've been reading over this today, repeatedly.

It has me thinking, when we stare up there we are basically looking at everything that has happened, and everything that will happen.

That is the sense that this piece gives me, simply wondrous...the idea and the writing.

Great writing, to my mind...I wish I could capture the way you write, its as if you constantly tease and torment the reader with things just beyond grasp.

Sorry, I have said it before..but it is something special in the way you write, and I think this is probably the best example of it.

David.

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raypool

Sat 10th Sep 2016 15:42

I quite often get a feeling of awe when reading your stuff elP and that must be a good thing. Always open to interpretation like a delicate spider's web that can be destroyed when touched too roughly. Left alone it hangs suspended and attractive.

Ray

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Harry O'Neill

Sat 10th Sep 2016 11:40

elPintor,
I like the way this makes you think of a (post Big
bang? ) sequence of `pre-explosive` continual inevitable sequence of smaller bangs turned radio-telescopically into sound. And how space does `sound` dense.


It makes one imagine the `shimmer` turning into the `scream` (I wonder where it all goes?)

A good `thinker` this one.

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