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Dreams In A Pale Mist

Swirling dreams in a pale mist;

Part-remembered shades of a distant past,

Creeping ethereally as wandering wraiths,

Drifting on the edge of consciousness,

Hovering on the threshold of perception.

A memory, or just a fantasy?

Following the tenuous subliminal traces

Of the ectoplasmic emanation

Elicits only faintly fleeting echoes

That reverberate with unresolved recognition,

And wriggle elusively away from waking recollection

In the pervasive anonymity of the new day.

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Trevor Alexander

Wed 24th Aug 2016 13:24

Thanks for comments.

Harry, not sure I want to extend it, I'll give it some thought, but I take your point about 'resolutely', and have tinkered accordingly....

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Harry O'Neill

Tue 23rd Aug 2016 21:22

Trevor,
This is good. All - apart from that `resolutely` - in
sync with itself.

(respectfully) why don`t you add a couplet and make it an
un -rhymed sonnet?

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Andy N

Tue 23rd Aug 2016 12:58

excellent, trevor. i like the first four or five lines in particular but its such a strong poem. you should be submitting this to a few mags etc

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