pops
sweet little bird
thunderous grey tom
no contest
snow settles
on the lip
melts
leaves
green gold grey gone
time passes
stick thrown
russet blur
returns
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Really effective stu. Fulfils the criteria IMO. No casualties.
Ray
i am reading kerouacs haiku book and it has inspired me to write what he describes as 'pops'. his definition is;
"The American Haiku is not exactly the Japanese Haiku. The Japanese Haiku is strictly disciplined to seventeen syllables but since the language structure is different I don't think American Haikus (short three-line poems intended to be completely packed with Void of Whole) should worry about syllables because American speech is something again... bursting to pop.
Above all, a Haiku must be very simple and free of all poetic trickery and make a little picture and yet be as airy and graceful as a Vivaldi Pastorella."
above are four i have attempted.
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Martin Elder
Wed 13th Jul 2016 23:00
Works well Stu , I particularly like
leaves
green gold grey gone
time passes
Nice one